Routh Avatar
A haiku poem by


Submitted Dec 23, 2006, 11:21:31 PM


An open casket,
A woman crying softly,
The snow falls slowly...


Mythbhavd Avatar


Commented Jan 1, 2007, 7:06:19 AM
Nice imagery, Chris. And the placement in nature and time works really well. I enjoyed it.
sage_sorceress Avatar


Commented Jan 2, 2007, 5:02:18 PM
I really like it but i feel like something's missing....
TerrisMist Avatar


Commented Jan 8, 2007, 8:09:40 AM
it is a gentle death. snow has always seemed cold, but also gentle. Its peaceful but sad at te same time. I really like it
Jake Avatar


Commented Jan 10, 2007, 7:08:44 AM
I feel like the harshest critic here, haha :P Not that I didn't think it was good, but it is missing that special something that might push it from a great haiku to an excellent haiku.
dark_angel Avatar


Commented Feb 7, 2007, 6:32:43 PM
I like it, but I agree with Tsyni in that it is missing something that would take it to the next level. :)
Dnavarre Avatar


Commented Jun 19, 2007, 3:45:47 AM
The thing that's midding is "plot" in a sense, the lines don't go together.
timmy9fingers Avatar


Commented Jan 28, 2010, 2:00:26 AM
It sets a mood, with the snow falling slowly it sets the mood of extreme calm, the calm of death perhaps, the woman is a symbol of what was left behind. Simple yet meaningful to the individual. As for the other comments - I would agree except in 17 syllables I don't see how to explain any more.