Oh, That I Were a Poet!

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Why the sadness, this long face?
You were treated the same in this place.
Honored with love, and given the boot.
Nothing is everything in a turkey shoot.

Life is but a bowl of warm ice cream,
Melted and stale, full of a cherry gleam.
The cherry is flavored, your own blood
To tempt and oppress those chewing cud.

But life, not as simple as should be,
Cuts the dull butter and falls away free.
Choosing a destiny for you, it turns opposite,
Prancing like Bambi as your throat is slits.

Cold and callous, life soon becomes.
Warm and loving, the saw blade hums.
Life loves you and kills you just the same but
Fantasia lives on, "Bastien, say my name!"

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Madhatter's picture
There is "light" phrasing with a slip of intense descriptions. It sort of sneaks up on you as you read it. I found my self re-reading certain sentences because the imagery was so graphic. I really liked this. Not sure if what I said makes sense, but that's how I read it. The rhythm of the poem deceives you. You could almost miss the intensity of the words because the phrasing kind of makes you want to skip along. ugh ok maybe I am senial right now...lol. What I am saying is ....I LOVE the phrasing with choice words. Ahhh nevermind....GOOD JOB!
kt6550's picture
Very good. Nicely written.
optimysticynic's picture
I'm not sure if I entirely understood this, but I enjoyed it none the less. I'm a big 'neverending story' fan also, I've used 'the nothing' reference in a few poems. Good stuff ballastic

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