The No Poem

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Up on the mountain
close to the sky
where the air is cold
and the wind is dry
they told me: shout!give it a try
and you'll fell better in an eye blink

I said No,no,no I can't
My throat will shut
and I am scared

Down by the sea
into the night
close to the waves
where there's no light
they told me : cry! give it a try
and you'll feel better in no time!

I said No,no,no I can't
My eyes will burn
and I am scared

Next to the road
close to them all
late at one evening,
I remember it was Fall,
they told me nothing;
they didn't care

The fault was mine,
for I was too scared
to let people care,
to let people help,
to listen, to talk..
and, in all, to dare.

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kt6550's picture
Very sad, and very good. However, I do not think the title quite fits. You may want to change it.
Boney G's picture
This is very good. I'm suprised more people havent commented on it. This flows very well I really enjoyed it.
Madhatter's picture
I have read this before, but I wanted to read it again and comment. This is such a picturesque poem of emotions. To trust, to dare, to open oneself up. The perspective was painted very nicely. I love rhythmic poetry, and this is beautifully grouped. I also LOVE that you called it the NO POEM...I don't know, it added to the intensity for me. Your style in this poem has me imagining a victorian girl, pouring her heart on tattered pages with ink stained fingers....lol, I know I am weird. Great Job!
Hiljenta's picture
I must thank you all for your very kind comments :)
Juneau's picture

This poem really speaks to me. In high school I was always to shy to take part in anything and now that I am out of high school I'm still a stranger to those who I have spent 4 years in a classroom with.

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