Alice

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The dark clouds of life hover over my soul.

I feel too much,

decrepit and vile are the reflections I see,

my fruitless life

I look to the heavens and feel God's tears on my face.

Sadness

I want to escape,

but where can I go?

The black hole

I think if I can just fall through

maybe it will swallow the vile soul up.

Maybe the escape is sweeter than the life lived

I want to be alone,

but where can I go?

The black hole

Free from the heaviness crouched on my shoulders

Free from the rampant tears and labored breaths

Oh to fall away...

to be alone...

but where can I go?

The black hole

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kt6550's picture
The black hole, in Ayurveda, is a place of sublime peace and contentment rarely reached except by the most spiritual. Just a thought.
Madhatter's picture
How interesting KT, thank you for mentioning Ayurveda. I looked it up and read upon it. Very interesting indeed. Perhaps the black hole isn't the cowards way out, as I often feel it is. Instead it is a place of peace. Changes the whole perspective of my poem when you look at it from that angle. Much appreciated!!
Rob Kosy's picture

Dark & quite chilling, i think. I reckon the black hole could have a number of interperetations, Mad lady. Perhaps the bottom of a bottle or an addiction.

Very well written.

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