Chapter 6: Oscar

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A boy stood at the bottom of his garden, at his feet was a deep hole, in his arms he cradled a large white box. Above his head clouds, burdened and black, waited for the right moment.

“Come on Eddie," a woman’s voice called from the kitchen window, “put the box down now – time for your tea... it’s fish fingers!”

The boy pulled the box closer to his chest; he looked up at the dark sky.

A louder, man’s voice, “For God’s sake put the dog in the hole and get inside boy! Look; accidents happen – get used to it! If I’d known you were going to act like this, I would never have bought you the damn animal; you’re certainly never having another one!”

The first drop slapped the boy’s cheek.

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Rob Kosy's picture
What? Obviously there is a change of direction afoot here, savage? fantasticaly written. I realy felt for the boy. I'm dying to know where this is going now, mr_cushions.......
savage_cushions's picture
Thanks Rob, I dont know if it's clear that this is a brief flashback to Edward's childhood. Could you let me know if that was clear... cheers
Rob Kosy's picture
I just re-read the last page of 'Tea & Pinochet' & would like to offer an appology, savage. However, I think the format of the Den, perhaps helped in my misinterpritation. I had just enjoyed chapter 5, then went off to do some other drivel for a few, then read chapter 6. I do think that, chapter 6 being so short, it would probably be better off being included at the end of chapter 5 to save any confusion, just a suggestion. Then again I am easily confused & usualy don't need any assistance in attaining that state. I think that if I were reading this in a published format (magazine or novel), which I will someday, my confusion would not have raised it's 'deputy dog' head. It flows perfectly now that you have pointed it out, savage.
savage_cushions's picture
Many thanks as always Rob. I did consider crow-barring this bit into the previous chapter but, as it was bit of a departure, I felt it would confuse. As far as publishing is concerned, I need to get the bugger finished; I have this paranoia about a publisher saying 'yes' and having to rush it; I'm rubbish with deadlines and time-scales.
Madhatter's picture
After reading the comments, I am following along quite nicely...hehehe.

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