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Heaven vs. Hell
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Overall Rating: 89.9%
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This writing has been rated by 2 members, resulting in a rating of 89.9% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results:
Concept/Plot:
Depending on the writing type, give your opinion on the overall plot if it is a story, or the concept of the writing if it is abstract such as a poem. Does it seem to make sense, strike a chord with you or seem a well chosen concept? Did the author stick to the concept or did they change mid-thought? | 89% |
Imagery:
Did the author use words and descriptions that allowed you to visualize the scenes portrayed in the writing? Did the feelings of the work stir your emotions as you read it? | 90.5% |
Spelling and Grammar:
Were the words spelled correctly? Was proper punctuation and grammar used? Could you easily understand sentances or did you have to re-read lines several times to understand what was meant? | 90% |
Flow/Rhythm:
Depending on the writing type, how did the writing flow? If it's a story, did it have a smooth, easy to follow flow? Did the flow of events make sense? If it's poetry, did the author stick with the syllable flow for that writing type? Did the lines rhyme properly if a rhyming device was used?
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Vocabulary:
Did the author use the same words over and over or did they use a broad vocabulary to get their exact point across? Could better wording be chosen then what they have? | 90% | |
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Written by: suicidenoter
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Type: Poem
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Submitted: 1278205361
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Hell sounded pretty great somedays,
If you get my gist,
Living never sounded perfect nowadays,
With you gone, away..,
My eyes always glaring,
My lips always falling,
My head always hanging down,
And my feet dragging slowly across the ground,
Everyone wanted to see,
To see what was wrong,
Oh, this pain, has lasted too long,
Heaven had started to sound fake,
Being athiest, oh, a new thing,
God never lifted a finger for us,
Not once, Not ever,
And I was done.
The End.
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#1 |
on July 04 2010 18:43:33
#2 |
on July 29 2010 15:51:23
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