Hard to Cry

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Submitted by mdrake3000 on Thu, 02/23/2012 - 03:41

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When I'm around you

I get the feeling that I know you

We can talk till we smile and lock eyes

Getting out of touch with time

While we are reading each other from the inside

I feel comfortable when I'm around you

I wanna dive in and put my lips on your lips

Warm sensation tingling my mind and my penis

Freya's Fate: Tristan

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Submitted by Imissmeaning on Wed, 02/22/2012 - 19:06

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**Just a continuation. Sorry it took so long. I haven't been able to decide what to do with this. Got a good idea of what I am going to do now though...Critique please! Sorry for any spelling/grammar mistakes.**

Tristan

Part One

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Submitted by ScottCole on Wed, 02/22/2012 - 11:02
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The Agency

James Haley awoke feeling groggy, as if from a long night's drinking. Last night's memories were not there however. Just a sensation all over his skin as if an endless silk sheet were being pulled off his body. Propping himself up on his elbows he looks around the unfamiliar apartment.

The Agency

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Submitted by ScottCole on Wed, 02/22/2012 - 10:56

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The story is loosely based around the MMORCE game Entropia Universe, and follows the main character James 'JH' Haley through a thriller type story line. This is my first attempt at writing so I would appreciate all the constructive criticism you can give me.

Under the Sheet

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Submitted by JD Rose on Wed, 02/22/2012 - 03:30

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Though I’ve loved large and small,
I never had to persevere at all.
Why do I always go for the one,
Whom stares me in the eyes,
And shows me all of my lies.

Take the Dive

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Submitted by JD Rose on Wed, 02/22/2012 - 01:43

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I’ve met many women
In my time above this ground.
Not too many I’d actually
like to mention
But some,
have made be proud.

Glue is that compound
That makes us all
Sound,
Together like all our ambitions
Never,
Spoke upside Down.

To watch someone sleep

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Submitted by Hiljenta on Tue, 02/21/2012 - 21:39

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How beautiful is it to watch a loved one sleep?
To see their peaceful face in the shadows of night
To see light smiles carved on their lips as they dream

How precious is it to watch a loved one sleep?
To listen to their breathing
To watch the light movement of their eyelids while they dream

Can Al be Trusted? (Chapter one)

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Submitted by niduin on Tue, 02/21/2012 - 19:14
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Hate Versus Love

The horror of the scene before me would haunt any normal man, it did me, when I was a normal man. Dead men lay all around, Engulfed in the darkness of their own blood. So violent was the death of these men, my attempts at discerning their identities was useless, and I stopped trying long ago.

Concord

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Submitted by Colleen Ludgate on Tue, 02/21/2012 - 12:05

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A fate of a twisted moon beyond
becomes a love's dedication song
to weld the soul's brittle bond.

To see how harsh winter's wind still blows
a distance travelled desert rose
come to cease my adverse prose.

Row upon row of anguished hearts
a battle to find true love imparts
to vanquish pain's dramatic arts.

Ad Analysis Essay, Allstate Insurance-Mayhem "Blind Spot" (:30)

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Submitted by DesertRat on Mon, 02/20/2012 - 12:35

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[ Would you tell me if you see a clear line here and any critique please. See if you can identify the two consumer appeals I try to explain to the reader. Thank you! DR] This is a popular sample in a series of ads from Allstate Insurance in which the company reminds us that mayhem is something that can happen anywhere, anytime.

Letting Go

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Submitted by Heartcrusher on Mon, 02/20/2012 - 08:50

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Follow this way in the darkest night
It steers you into a shelter
Does this road seem too long tonight?
You haven‘t seen any welter

Don‘t wait for me
Don‘t wait for anything
Maybe I‘ll never turn back
The hope‘s been crucified
By the wicked ones
As path to world dominance

Lost

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Submitted by optimysticynic on Mon, 02/20/2012 - 03:03

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I took a wrong turn somewhere

I’m not quite sure where, but I know I’m not supposed to be here

There is a place I was destined to be

A life, a path, a reality, that was intended to be mine

I must have taken the wrong job

Perhaps I kissed the wrong man

Maybe it was as simple as missing a bus

Now here I am

Alice

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Submitted by Madhatter on Mon, 02/20/2012 - 02:51

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The dark clouds of life hover over my soul.

I feel too much,

decrepit and vile are the reflections I see,

my fruitless life

I look to the heavens and feel God's tears on my face.

Sadness

I want to escape,

but where can I go?

The black hole

I think if I can just fall through

'Ship of Fools' Or 'Dead Reckoning'

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Submitted by Ian Christ on Sun, 02/19/2012 - 11:01

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A boat of buffoons!
Better a ship of fools than a town and temple of fools! That’s what I say!
A town and temple of fools surrounded by age-old walls made of fools! How tightly they wedge themselves together these clay-brains, these brick-heads!

Strange Matter

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Submitted by Heartcrusher on Sun, 02/19/2012 - 10:37

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Why has God given the power to the human hands?
Is it for the final destroyer?
Forget the religions the evil will find the ways
How to control you all ever

Strange matter
Silent weapon of tomorrow
World will demerge
There‘s no space to follow

Out Of The Shadows

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Submitted by Heartcrusher on Sun, 02/19/2012 - 10:34

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Damned yesterday‘s morning
I‘m sailing the ocean on the boat
And the voices are calling
But I‘ll never go back anymore

The stalker is coming for me
He‘s smelt my scent on the road
From behind I feel his breath
As the ultimate survival mode

Is there somebody who‘ll take me out?

midas well touch yourself

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Submitted by Ian Christ on Sun, 02/19/2012 - 09:41

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two faced flowers
AND SHARPENED POINTS OF VIEW

Tearing morphine from the clutch of fallen soldiers
they are well enough

stick it in the sweltering SWELLING GUts
through paper plane lacerations
a nest of barbed wire and shiny teeth
we can incubate INCINERATE OUR HUNGRY CELLS

Strength

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Submitted by Tuffen on Sat, 02/18/2012 - 15:02

I want to find strength

Strength and confidence which I wont find messing around at school or at home.

I want to be apart of something bigger, something that matters, something that may change the way the world works. Our flawed world.

Cauchemar

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Submitted by Madhatter on Sat, 02/18/2012 - 13:24

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I can sense you, I know you're there. You don’t have to hide, because I know you're there. Please don’t wait, until I close my eyes. Please don’t wait, because I know your there. You're not defined. You live in darkness. You dwell in the shadow of my fears. Step out of the shadows and form yourself. Step out of the shadows and show yourself.

Final Tears

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Submitted by Ballistophallic on Fri, 02/17/2012 - 23:49

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Could warmer springs of evening stars
Realize the truth of who we are?
Nay, never has this truth been heard.
You say nothing with your empty words.

Flies south in winter does the sparrow,
As we transform selfishly to the narrow.
Closed off in words of beautiful hate,
To turn back now would be too late.

Oh, That I Were a Poet!

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Submitted by Ballistophallic on Fri, 02/17/2012 - 23:41

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Why the sadness, this long face?
You were treated the same in this place.
Honored with love, and given the boot.
Nothing is everything in a turkey shoot.

Life is but a bowl of warm ice cream,
Melted and stale, full of a cherry gleam.
The cherry is flavored, your own blood
To tempt and oppress those chewing cud.

My Blight

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Submitted by where_wallace on Fri, 02/17/2012 - 22:43

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The unforgettable deed, in a moment without strength
Forever my partner, a guilt for life's length
A part of me, like mind, heart, or soul
The weight which anchors, burdens, takes a toll
A step forward does not create space
But pulls you with me, at my side, in your place
Dense and heavy, consuming my light

Clear Skies

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Submitted by the_nev_a_prospect on Fri, 02/17/2012 - 19:22

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The first rays of the morning sun hit the flat grey surface of the monolith, on a cold winter morning, like the gentle touch of a goddess, like child's play, like a dying man's last breath. The rectangular shape twists and bends at the corners, trying to escape itself. The rough concrete and steel holds it together in a timeless embrace.

Greece: Where dreams are now prohibited

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Submitted by Hiljenta on Fri, 02/17/2012 - 08:20

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I am one of the 11 million people living in the Balkan and, supposedly, European country known as Greece. Us Greeks call it Hellas.

Is there a way to insert chapters into an already-made book spine?

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Submitted by ff8moomba on Thu, 02/16/2012 - 22:13

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Is there a way to insert chapters into an already-made book spine? (Or is that even what a book spine is for? x_x; ) I managed to put up a few chapters, but they don't seem to be connected to each other in any way.

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