Very well put, but don't so easily dismiss the effect a marriage & family life can have on the world. I'm sure your dad is proud of you already, Tuffen (trust me I'm a father myself) & if you manage to achieve the things you want, he will only be prouder. I think that if we all just try to be better people - more considerate, more aware, then that will make the world a better place. I believe education is the key. education & support.

I usually don't opine as to content or idea, and just try to help with the writing. On this one, I like the clarity you establish by saying what is it that you want to do.

This part below is a bit awkward as it breaks off the flow of your ideas. I would eliminate it (irrelevant and it would need explaining, e.g. why is it bad? how would you be "stuck"? etc).

[I don’t want to be stuck in a dead end job in a house which isn’t the way I like stuck with a guy who doesn’t give two craps about how I work and how I think.]

For example like this. I took some liberty at punctuaction suggestions.

"I want to find strength

Strength and confidence which I [will not] find messing around at school or at home.

I want to be a part of something bigger, something that matters, something that may change the way the world works; our flawed world.

I want to become someone my Dad will be proud of, because at the moment I feel like I’m failing at being a good daughter.

I want to make a change.

I want to be someone who can lead a group of people into action. [To] show people that just because I’m from a small town that nobody’s heard of it doesn’t mean I can’t make a difference.

The world is flawed, and so are we but together we can take a step forward and make a difference. [good sentence] One person can move another and they can move a crowd. A crowd can move a city and a city can move a country.

The correct thinking and the correct words can bring a either rebuild or destroy.

I want to build and destroy as necessary."

Thank you.